ext_35784 ([identity profile] clauderainsrm.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] therealljidol2014-12-12 10:01 am
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Home Game/Killing Floor - Week 31

It's another week and another Home Game thread, with a Killing Floor twist!

This is a place to post your entries to the latest topic "“The future outwits all our certitudes” if you are not a current contestant. Maybe you were eliminated or dropped. Perhaps you are only now finding Idol but just want to write.

This is the place to link your entry!

The Killing Floor twist means that we are encouraging constructive criticism for the entries - and anyone who either (1) posts two pieces of constructive criticism to this thread OR posts a Home Entry and one piece of constructive criticism will be eligible to send me an email (at [email protected] ) to give me their top 3 choices for immunity for the week.

Have fun!
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[identity profile] watching-ships.livejournal.com 2014-12-12 06:12 pm (UTC)(link)
http://watching-ships.livejournal.com/467038.html

Last week's entry. I'd like to make this better and I would love to hear your thoughts. I've already caught a couple things that slipped through (a typo, a missed word) and I want to know how others think I can improve it.

Thanks!

[identity profile] penpusher.livejournal.com 2014-12-13 12:18 am (UTC)(link)
The Cos of Bad Behavior (http://penpusher.livejournal.com/724344.html)

Home game entry. Best luck to the remaining 25/24!

[identity profile] i-17bingo.livejournal.com 2014-12-14 05:29 am (UTC)(link)
So there's a magazine whose theme for the next submission period is "Drenched," and so I'd like to submit to them my entry for Week 27, an Open Topic I've titled Cast Away (http://i-17bingo.livejournal.com/176945.html). The rub is this: it needs to be between 3,000 to 7,000 words. It's currently 1,473.

So my question is, is it possible to double its size without padding?

The story as is starts in the middle of the action, so there's plenty of room in the front for expansion. And, while I'm reasonably certain it's self-contained, I will have to bring up somehow (not sure yet) that her family has a bit of a magical bent, but do so without dipping too deeply into my mythology. Not sure how I'd do that.

Does anyone have any ideas?
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[identity profile] roina-arwen.livejournal.com 2014-12-15 04:41 am (UTC)(link)
I composed a Cento poem for my Home Game entry this week. It's my favorite type of poem to put together - a patchwork of lines from other poets. You can find it here:

Cento (http://roina-arwen.livejournal.com/1673967.html)

[identity profile] alycewilson.livejournal.com 2014-12-15 09:26 pm (UTC)(link)
http://alycewilson.livejournal.com/628572.html

[identity profile] kehlen-crow.livejournal.com 2014-12-17 06:56 pm (UTC)(link)
A super late entry that may be (and will be) partially blamed on back ouchies that kept me in bed more or less for three days straight and back there directly after work for another two, but those are excuses, for of course I could have written that both on Monday and yesterday.

http://kehlen-crow.livejournal.com/959106.html


But whatever, I am writing for me, because my current routine of at least three bouts of editing is really good for my writing.
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